Swimming Recount Blog post

WALT: identify area of need from writing sample feedback and make a conscious effort to improve that area.

SC: Co-constructed

- paragraphs if a focus

- Punctuation that you don’t normally use

- similes and vocabulary that you dont normally use - thesaurus

- Ideas - simple to complex. Lots of detail.

my focus is..detail and spelling.

this photo show the year 8 boys starting an intece race. they dived in like flying dolphins.it was like a herd of elephents. derron lost his balance??and fell into the chilli cold watar.at the end it was all very close but cody took it out.

the second photo shows the red ami resting and talking to frends on the seats.as we know it was a boiling hot day it felt like we were right by the sun.

the third pic shows the year 8 boys competitively competing to the finish.as you can see cody is about to have a pain full day ahead of him.